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It's an as true to life story as you'll get. My mind overcompensates and fixes most typos and syntax erors automatically. I love these books. I can;t say anything on the poor translation quality. Ona few occasions I had to stop but if you're like me you shouldn't have any trouble. I really like the normalness of this novel I guess. It's not some fantastical story with demons have sex with pretty boys.
i love this book you should totally buy it trust me you won't regret it.i would like to tell you more but i don't want to spoil it for you
I really enjoyed the first book much more than the sequel. In the next arc, our couple are on vacation. Wataru gets friendly with Kazuki's cool and smooth talking upperclassman, basically allowing the other guy to pursue him and rousing Kazuki's jealousy. There is some really cheesy dialogue on par with Star Wars III.
The narrative talks about how impressive and intimidating he is, but this did not come across in anything he says. Maybe this is due to the lackluster translation, but the passages about their activities are quite dull and even boring. There are some cute moments, like when Kazuki suddenly kisses Wataru in the car, shocking some grade school onlookers, but for the most part I would press fast forward, so to speak. The couple's reaction to the brother's threat is sweet, though. When Kazuki's brother finally appears and declares opposition, it's rather anticlimactic. The whole process of getting together and doing it for the first time is so awkward and goofy, it came across as being realistic and very amusing.However, in the sequel our couple have been together for a year, but are still stepping on each other's toes.
I got sick of reading about how cool Kazuki looks and how people always turn his way. I don't want to give it away, but this arc has a very satisfying conclusion.Overall I feel that the book suffers from inflated text and cliche situations, but the characters are just so appealing that I will have to read the third volume and reread parts of this one, too. You'd think that after a year Kazuki would know Wataru well enough to realize that he's just dense and naive, and go easy on him instead of stirring up needless drama. The ending is also unoriginal: they make up and make out, which is how the first two arcs ended.
Some of the translation was a bit rough and awkward in diction as well. Kazuki and Wataru in here is so. and some lines that are supposed to be /thoughts/ aren't even italicized or anything. sometimes they appear few pages before the scene actually happens, and sometimes after it happens. First of all, I'm very disappointed with DMP's editing of the context.
If you're looking for smut-type of plot, or even action filled drama, you definitely won't find here. Not only that, but the new characters Asaka and Shohei feel very necessary to the plot even if they are side casts.And as always, I love Odagiri-sensei's illustrations to death. At the very least, I was hoping the layout be correct, but apparently not.As for the actual story itself, despite all those technical errors, I just totally love the couple even more now. As LKK stated, we begin to see flaws in Kazuki's character, so now their relationship feels even more reciprocal. I do wish they keep honorifics though. (It is clearly an example that plot-movement is more important than loads of fanservice)In the second chapter, for once we see Kazuki being troubled, and it's Wataru who reassures him - since it has always been the other way around. Please keep in mind that English and Japanese writing styles differ, and it is impossible to translate so that it fits the English reading mind 100%. The relationship between K and W is just so down-to-earth, and their worries and struggles are really realistic.
So many missing quotation marks. precious Kannagi-sensei's writing is romantic, deep, and insightful. Rather, the events that happen in the novel are really normal and typical, but it's how they effect Kazuki and Wataru that are the highlights - it's the ever fluctuating and strengthening of their relationship that really matters. but, that part I can excuse since they try to translate as literal as possible. One mistake they're still repeating is the placement of the illustrations.
Sometimes thoughts were in quotations, but often they were not, and as the reader I had to spend more time trying to figure out who was saying what, or if they were saying it at all. If you liked the first novel, I highly recommend continuing through the series. I can however complain that the writing style in the translation lacked cohesiveness. It also seemed that in a number of the instances where thoughts were not quoted, that they originally had been, because the first letter in those thoughts was still capitalized.
I'm sure DMP ran MS Word Spellcheck on it at some point, but that seems to be where they ended. It is not that anything is overwhelmingly surprising or exciting, but I would have to settle on "inspiring." This lovely couple makes you want to believe that everything, despite obstacles, fighting and misunderstandings, is going to turn out just fine. This one was written after the manga version, so that little extra side story that Odagiri wrote for the end of the manga makes some cameo appearances in this volume (a couple parts towards the end of the book were laugh out loud funny). To do this he has to make some money, so he gets a job working for his senior, who bears a striking resemblance to himself in both appearance and personality. I can't tell you, since I actually lost count, how many easily identifiable mistakes were in this printed novel.
The translation was a little awkward, but I'm not about to blame the fact that English and Japanese are such different languages on the publisher. Anyway, aside from my nitpicking it really isn't a bad read. There were words that were obviously meant to be other words and numerous mistakes that I could believe someone who did not read and write English as a first language would make grammatically. .DMP needs to proofread their novel translations.
Odagiri does the illustrations again, and again they are beautiful. My heart has a little place carved out for Yuichi and Wataru's love for each other (one of the more beautifully written in the genre), and I always enjoy reading their adventures. Yuichi is in college and Wataru is about to get busy with his exams in a couple months, much like Yuichi had been back in part two of the first novel, so Yuichi plans a vacation. The color illustrations at the beginning of the book are even wonderful enough to make me want to have them as a poster on my wall. I know I will be ordering volume three just as soon as it comes out.
Geez. I actually think this one had more than the first novel for this series. Volume two of the OTRFK novel series takes place almost a year after the first story. As far as graphic content goes, Kannagi has a beautifully descriptive style that lends itself to being vague enough not to feel erotic, but clear enough to be entirely romantic when it comes to the lovemaking scenes of our heroes (of which which there are numerous in this volume). The story really is beautiful.
Also, related to this is the seemingly out of place illustrations in this volume. I give it four stars because of the awkward translation, but otherwise a wonderful story. Part two, Eternity of the Palm, takes place during the vacation itself, and another person comes to try to stand in the way of Yuichi and Wataru's relationship, so they have their hands full even as they try to relax and enjoy themselves away from the prying eyes of Tokyo and their lives there. Some of them were unfinished sentences, and a few seemed to be the result of a paragraph or sentence being broken in the middle, but the punctuation to correct this not being added.
This of course creates a lot of drama for the couple. It wasn't that there were mispelled words, no. The Left Hand Dreams of Him is a true sequel to the first novel, so if you aren't familiar with the first book, you might want to read that before giving this one a try. In the first volume the illustrations popped on the pages at just the right moments for the events they depicted, but in volume two they are often either several pages too early or too late.
I would hope that a major publisher of yaoi manga in America would hire someone to do the job of an editor and fix these kinds of things, though. There were also a lot of punctuation mistakes.
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